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  • 1Can you correct this short story I wrote in English?

    IF YOU CAN MAKE CORRECTIONS IN CAPS, so I SEE ... I would use the correct terms in English, so please correct it for me:. D IF YOU WANT ME A COMMENT ABOUT DA HISTORY TOO (whether you appreciate it or not) He was bound, had a look of anger while ice chips fell. Fenrir, that was the way it used to be called the fen-dweller, reached down and tried to shake around. Hatred was surrounded was like a bomb, and that bomb will harm a human being in his deepest self. But in reality there were no people here. Týr caught him, he was now a little under control pawn gods. Abandoned by all, wanted revenge for making and thinking and thinking followed. Then he yelled, and his howls were terrible. He tried to break the chain, just did not know. He ignored it would go on until the end of the world. He ignored during Ragnarök only be broken chain let it go and fight Odin, father of gods. Again, ignored him, even though that day is getting closer and closer, coming to make history indelibly. [...] Three long years passed, and the years have been characterized by cold winters. The earth shook, actually earthquakes hit everywhere and no one could survive. But he, the wolf, still tied up. He had a look of anger while ice chips fell. Everywhere there was just nothing but disorder and chaos. Evil spirits were around in those frozen lands and threatened to blow the cold fire in the soul of one who has in his way. Fenrir stood up, and suddenly felt the silence. He saw the clouds, it was black as the hated felt about the gods, those gods that bound him to cheat. Silence and heard chants faded heathen. Hadas, Valkyries, night elves sang in tongues. They sang of God's Son, who avenge his father died in a fight. This son would win against evil. But Fenrir did not understand, he was as dull compared to these prophecies. [...] The war in the air, the peace did not exist in the bygone era. Fenrir was living in anguish. One morning, the sun rose that night the moon and the stars disappeared. In the darkness came the storm, floods destroyed what was back on earth, but his chain Fenrir and did not have to deal with them. Suddenly, he heard terrible screams, saw coming toward him a ray. He was raised, his chain broke. She felt free. He fled. [...] He sojourned for several hours while the acid rain dropped muddy. He reached the great plain. There he saw the look of Odin who was looking up and down full of himself. When the father of the gods "laughed and mocked Fenrir, the wolf opened its mouth and grew taller. Their ears touched the sky, chin touched the ground. Odin said," You're going to pay for it they did on earth, may be the way you want to be. "But the father of gods was so full of himself, so sure of success that he did not realize jaws of a wolf. dribble Some of them got weird and was Odin, who was paralyzed before stop talking. way Fenrir snatched and devoured. Odin, the father of the gods', died so miserably. Even I have time to fight. A major disaster, a great pity, a outrage, an affront to the mind of the gods', a great disbelief on earth nearly destroyed. [...] He was happy and fled but Vidar, son of Odin, the father of the gods', found it. And Vidar was really angry, while Fenrir was foolish, because it was written: "Foolish is he who is sure to win, silly is that despiseth, fool is the one that feels better than others." But Vidar knew virtue in the battlefield and that could prove to be an outstanding warrior. He learned to revenge, could kill an evil, understood what love really is. Killed hit in the abdomen. And he, the wolf's body splat Odin, father of VIDAR. He threw them, and his son fell down before them. Collected and then went to sea, where dispersed. He prayed, some tears fell. They were tears crystal. Then he got up, put his sword on the cover and back. A ray of light shines in the darkness, and hope reborn on earth.

  • 2What is a good opening line for a short story about a tsunami hitting Naples Italy?

    English essay and need a good opening sentence for a tsunami hitting Italy , where my characters ... any ideas? please would be greatly appreciated ... I want to start with something that shows they are waiting in the dark for survivors

  • 3Please translate japanese to english and english to japanese?

    - Hare - Aki - It's snowing . - The wind is blowing . - Jishin - The school is not cool . - I have no dream. - Kyou no desu ka wa dou tenki ? - Donna tenki ga suki desu ka ? Kirai - tenki wa arimasu ka na ?

  • 4What Do You Think About This Poem I Wrote?

    Eye to eye , lips to lips , skin to skin , baby oooh I'm in, called me and let me in your warm cozy house then became an ocean , and seaweed wrapped me so deep hereby, I was out of breath swimming hear hide tide making waves . I'm still swimming , I am drowning in your ocean until no more breath left.

  • 5I wrote a poem.?

    Could be better ... that's why I post it. Silence . Observer . Overanalyzing and dissecting my soul , all wondered , knowing nothing , despite this desperate desire to perceive, Despite this desperate desire to decipher. I contemplate my disability , that follows the dark depths , Indefinite lengths not to be penetrated , What I know in my heart can never be fathomed , Despite what longing , Despite my cry , Abandoned in the wind , Flits like sand in the wind , eddies , holes like butterflies Waves as silk sleeves , Whispering as a broken heart while her lover leaves. And the moon smiles in spite of me , Diana smiles curled over me, back alone. And wolves croon the song that can not continue , My voice is too hoarse from singing, My lips trembling cast their silly noises , musical light of Growing lilts on my cheeks , my soul is poured spontaneous diamonds on my cheeks , as birds fly to heaven , and fall back to earth : Flying and falling ,

  • 6What do you think of my new christian song i just wrote?

    My young minister wanted to write a song to play in the youth group in two weeks and I wrote this song called

  • 7I just wrote a song, can someone tell me if it good?

    I just wrote a song about the end of the world , but can be interpreted differently. I also wonder if anyone can tell me if it's a good song or not , if there is any error or can anyone help me fix or make the song better ? thanks by the way its supposed to be like a rock song ( Verse 1) The seas will rise as the ground shakes people screaming in fear while the ground shakes the sky will fall buildings will collapse leaving nothing but ashes ( Chorus ) All I could hear the screams are all I see is smoke the lights begin to fade I can not believe what I see ( Verse 2) The end is near like all fear panic Some kill others hesitate as we are all blinded by a bright light and that's the last I see ... Main Riff X2 ( Chorus ) There will come a day when all panic The day will come when we sleep forever

  • 8I wrote this in like, 10 minutes. waddya think?

    The end of the end It was the night before the apocalypse, and over all the earth Not a soul was asleep, as were the hand. They all stood there waiting, neither spoke The crowd shivered violently, ever broke the silence. Why are we waiting? Why should we die! The thoughts echoed endlessly around there minds. A quick glance there, a foot movement here The crowd dragged nervously, you could smell his own fear. When, suddenly, a loud bang and crack Then as quickly as it began, everyone becomes black. The ground begins to peel, the earth begins to tremble! Oh, lucky for the writer to do. When you leave the black, came a man on a horse Tis the horsemen of war, pestilence and famine, of course! But where is the fourth man, the crowd cheered wildly "Oh like death," they said, "we will gladly look" The crowd was shocked, to hear this replica When an old cunning, took to mind and I thought "If I stop these men with my wit as a weapon my The world will stand still and watch my invite " "Sorry," he said, in a tone so endearing "Will you brave three riders please lend your audience?" bravely stood riders could appeal when the smartest of the group, said sarcastically "well". The old man spoke quickly of emotions and things In explaining the reasons for not hurting your be A minute passed after he gave his speech The riders seemed baffled by this gallivant Hours passed as riders did talk And with a nod end, everyone started walking! In the sky and out of this place Riders, said bluntly "we will give them some space" And so, through this old mans wit infallible he managed to save us, because we just do not quit! And so time passed, and the earth still revolved around When, suddenly, he heard a strange sound.

  • 9Can people tell me what they think of this thing i wrote?

    The ground beneath me earthquakes . Fragments of land around me fall quickly into a dark abyss. Just when I thought I stood on the earth would fall , the shaking stops and I'm standing on a small plot of land freely suspended above the unknown . I am isolated , I have no one . Gradually, my source of light fades until I am completely besieged by darkness . Calling loneliness , nobody pays any attention to my screams . Weeks pass , I try again to scream . A weak response . I call again, this time the answer has more clarity . I spend the nest two weeks talking to her , little by little , she brings light into my world and begin to repair the ground he had lost once. As you begin to approach her , I found a glass panel . I try to break it, but none of my attempts prevail strong heart. So give up, and we talked . We talked about our past and present . We also discussed the future possibilities when we find a way through the glass , because when my land connected with it .

  • 10English Grammar Help!?

    Q1 . Residents in this respect the creation of goods ______ ( shook , shake, shake, shake ) yesterday afternoon . Q2. As soon as Mrs Teo left the classroom ______ ( and therefore when) students began to make noise . Thanks for your help !

  • 11translate this to english

    mama tenki desu

  • 12English Diary - please fix my sentences?

    I would appreciate if you capitalize the words that you post . There were earthquakes in the northeast (north east ) days to Japan a few dew. Above all , followed by a huge tsunami earthquakes . I heard the news that a number of missing persons . ( I heard that some people were missing and I learned that there are a number of missing persons ) is more than 8000 people . However, it turned out that the number indicated . I watched the news showing cars and homes in the water flowing by the tsunami . The freight wagons were drawn up by mud and water that was caused by the tsunami . There were people in the car ! I was confused if I was watching the news or watching a movie . I also heard that a building collapsed in a nuclear plant ( destroyed ) causing residents near the plant exploded radiation. This is very dangerous . Therefore, the government told the people to stay in their homes by the government can make sure everything is okay . Another story was a hotel near the coast collapsed and people were not able to escape the building . I feel bad for the people who lost loved ones and who have lost their homes . The earthquake was even bigger than the earthquake that struck Haiti in 2008 . I wish the situation would be resolved soon . I also hope that no more disasters worldwide .