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QCan you correct this short story I wrote in English?

IF YOU CAN MAKE CORRECTIONS IN CAPS, so I SEE ... I would use the correct terms in English, so please correct it for me:. D IF YOU WANT ME A COMMENT ABOUT DA HISTORY TOO (whether you appreciate it or not)

He was bound, had a look of anger while ice chips fell.

Fenrir, that was the way it used to be called the fen-dweller, reached down and tried to shake around. Hatred was surrounded was like a bomb, and that bomb will harm a human being in his deepest self. But in reality there were no people here. Týr caught him, he was now a little under control pawn gods. Abandoned by all, wanted revenge for making and thinking and thinking followed. Then he yelled, and his howls were terrible. He tried to break the chain, just did not know. He ignored it would go on until the end of the world. He ignored during Ragnarök only be broken chain let it go and fight Odin, father of gods. Again, ignored him, even though that day is getting closer and closer, coming to make history indelibly.
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Three long years passed, and the years have been characterized by cold winters. The earth shook, actually earthquakes hit everywhere and no one could survive. But he, the wolf, still tied up. He had a look of anger while ice chips fell. Everywhere there was just nothing but disorder and chaos. Evil spirits were around in those frozen lands and threatened to blow the cold fire in the soul of one who has in his way. Fenrir stood up, and suddenly felt the silence. He saw the clouds, it was black as the hated felt about the gods, those gods that bound him to cheat. Silence and heard chants faded heathen. Hadas, Valkyries, night elves sang in tongues. They sang of God's Son, who avenge his father died in a fight. This son would win against evil. But Fenrir did not understand, he was as dull compared to these prophecies.
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The war in the air, the peace did not exist in the bygone era. Fenrir was living in anguish. One morning, the sun rose that night the moon and the stars disappeared. In the darkness came the storm, floods destroyed what was back on earth, but his chain Fenrir and did not have to deal with them. Suddenly, he heard terrible screams, saw coming toward him a ray. He was raised, his chain broke. She felt free. He fled.
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He sojourned for several hours while the acid rain dropped muddy. He reached the great plain. There he saw the look of Odin who was looking up and down full of himself. When the father of the gods "laughed and mocked Fenrir, the wolf opened its mouth and grew taller. Their ears touched the sky, chin touched the ground. Odin said," You're going to pay for it they did on earth, may be the way you want to be. "But the father of gods was so full of himself, so sure of success that he did not realize jaws of a wolf. dribble Some of them got weird and was Odin, who was paralyzed before stop talking. way Fenrir snatched and devoured. Odin, the father of the gods', died so miserably. Even I have time to fight. A major disaster, a great pity, a outrage, an affront to the mind of the gods', a great disbelief on earth nearly destroyed.
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He was happy and fled but Vidar, son of Odin, the father of the gods', found it. And Vidar was really angry, while Fenrir was foolish, because it was written: "Foolish is he who is sure to win, silly is that despiseth, fool is the one that feels better than others." But Vidar knew virtue in the battlefield and that could prove to be an outstanding warrior. He learned to revenge, could kill an evil, understood what love really is. Killed hit in the abdomen. And he, the wolf's body splat Odin, father of VIDAR. He threw them, and his son fell down before them. Collected and then went to sea, where dispersed. He prayed, some tears fell. They were tears crystal. Then he got up, put his sword on the cover and back. A ray of light shines in the darkness, and hope reborn on earth.

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#1Ellie BomarAnswered at 2013-01-15 15:27:52
He was bound, with an angry look on his face as the ice fell. Fenrir, which was what we used to call the fen-dweller, bent down and tried to shake around. Hatred was surrounded was like a bomb, and that bomb will harm a human being in his deepest self. But in reality there were no people here. Týr caught him, he was now a little pawn under the control of God. Abandoned by all, wanted revenge for making and thinking and thinking followed. Then he yelled, and his howls were terrible. He tried to break the chain, but just do not know how. He tried to ignore the fact that he would have to go on until the end of the world. He ignored the fact that only in the chain would break Ragnarök let it go and fight Odin, father of God. Again, ignored him, even though that day is getting closer and closer, coming to make history indelibly. [...] Three long years passed, and those years have been characterized by cold winters. The earth shook, HIT real earthquakes everywhere and no one could have survived. But he, the wolf, still tied up. He had an angry look YOUR FACE ONE ice as he fell. Everywhere was nothing but disorder and chaos. Evil spirits lurking around in the frozen earth and fire threatened to blow cold in the soul of anyone who got in his way. Fenrir stood up, and suddenly felt the silence. He saw the clouds were as black as his hatred towards the gods, the gods who had tied. Silence and heard chants faded heathen. Hadas, Valkyries and the night elves sang in tongues. They sang about the son of God, to avenge his father death in a fight. The son triumph against evil. But Fenrir not understand, it was like I was deaf address these prophecies. [...] The war in the air, there was peace in the bygone era. Fenrir was living in anguish. One morning, the sun rose, and disappeared that night the moon and stars. In the darkness came the storm, floods destroyed what was in the earth, but its chain Fenrir and faced them. Suddenly, he heard terrible screams, saw coming toward him a ray. He was raised, his chain broke. She felt free. He escaped. [...] He sojourned for several hours, while acid rain, mud dripping down. He reached the great plain. There he saw the look of Odin who was looking up and down full of himself. When the father of God began to laugh and make fun of Fenrir, the wolf opened its mouth and grew taller. His ears touched the sky, chin touched the ground. Odin said, "You will pay for what you did on this earth, that is the way you want to be." But the father of God was so full of himself, so sure of success that he did not realize jaws of the wolf. Some odd dribble out of them and dripped on Odin, who was paralyzed before stop talking. Fenrir snatched and devoured. Odin, the father of God, died so miserably. Even I have time to fight. A major disaster, a great pity, outrage, an affront to God's mind, a great disbelief on Earth almost destroyed. [...] He fled but Vidar, son of Odin, the father of God, found it. Vidar was very angry, because Fenrir was foolish, because it was written: "Foolish is he who is sure to win, which is silly underestimates fool who thinks he is better than others." But Vidar knew virtue in the battlefield and that could prove to be an outstanding warrior. He learned to revenge, could kill a villain, he understood what love really was. He committed suicide by hitting his abdomen. And he, the wolf's body splat Odin, father of VIDAR. Vomiting, and later his son fell down before them. Collected and then went to sea, where dispersed. He prayed, some tears streamed down. They were tears crystal. Then he got up, put his sword on the cover and back. A ray of light shines in the darkness, and the hope was reborn on earth.
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